Here is the concept of a before / after and the story (so far) goes as follows – its all up in the air so far
Thoughts?
Backstory (this can be a page or two)
Heidi was a girl who didnt like being a college student
She was rich, but she was out of shape, spoiled rotten and had a bad temper.
In her classes……
I dont want to re-take the test, cant I just buy an A? (Heidi)
In this world, you wont always get what you want Heidi…. (teacher)
In her electives……
You’re going to have to play more if you want a passing grade (gym teacher Ms Banderas)
and in her personal life
“They think they are sooooo hot together”
(she frowns at a very athletic couple, the guy she likes)
Why cant I have what I want? its NOT FAIR!!!
(she is pouting, crying a little alone in the hallway at school)
Until one day….
(a person walking away from the doorstep at night, as a box is left there)
The next morning
“huh, whats this?”
The box is opened, close up inside a note reads
I know your thoughts. I know you want POWER
Take a drop from this vial and become the powerful being you deserve
She looks at it with disregard
“Must be a vitamin I ordered online or something
What lame packaging! Oh well, better take it”
Transformation page 1 (can be 2 pages)
“what is this, I feel it changing me”
(show the face changing from uglier to pretty, hair getting a tad longer)
Transformation page 2
“My tits, are they growing?
(top down view of boobs growing)
Transformation page 3
“… and my stomach, I always wanted abs!!”
(feeling newly defined abs)
Transformation page 4
“Whats this? Is it what I think it is?”
(her checking her newly bulged bicep)
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At this point, she is not a superheroine yet, or at that level of strength
She is the strongest person at her school now, able to lift about 350kg/750lb but doesnt yet know it. As she takes more pills during the course of the story, she will become something of a super heroine.
We can go an adult route, a revenge/adult route
